Analytical Report

Here is the professor’s feedback from the previous rhetorical assignment related to this

Submission Feedback

Overall Feedback

Solid work, and good implementation of my feedback. Some minor notes:

-You don’t need the Gunawan article; you can reference FOMO as a general idea that people are familiar with, or if you feel that you need a source, something like a dictionary definition or even the Wikipedia page is more expedient. When you go out of your way to cite an academic article and then you don’t use the rest of it, you’ll do more harm to your credibility than goodyou’ll convey that you didn’t care to find the most appropriate source. (In my email, I posed the question, “Why are these sources here if you don’t even need them?” That question remains.)

-Be mindful of some of your phrasing and clarity. The end of your (extremely long) thesis includes this clause:

“…which directly serves the business objectives of the organization revenue growth in the volatile economic climate due to professional training.“

Is the “revenue growth” the objective? Is it the name of the organization? Did you mean to write “organization‘s” instead? I’m not sure what this sentence says.

Later, you write that public searches for the “Find a Notary” page “went up to 187,500,” but what Thun says is that page visits increased to that amount. (The searches could have been higher.)

Take care to accurately represent what you mean to say.

Keep the source (National Notary Association by Thunn David). Maybe find a new second source or FOMO reference or citing to help support this feedback for this report writing